Despina Domek
Monday, August 8, 2011
Does anyone like the start of my story?
I kinda like the attitude. But in the first sentence you didn't say who's speaking, and you never start a piece of writing with dialogue. And what exactly is she doing with her leg? I don't get that part. Other than that it's pretty good though :)
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